11:11 When It Happened
It all happened at 11:11…
He was bald. But only on the top of his head, each straight strand lying below the bald spot— grey and black, pushed up by his hardened hair cells. His headphones were sitting on top, black in sturdy plastic. He moved it every few seconds as if part of a ritual, as if his ears have moved position.
Then he turned his head, looking for something lost in the midst of the hustle and the bustle —perhaps he missed the way the buildings in the city all had the same colour, conjoined and set in stone, designed to be a direct replica of the other, his head returned, facing the front. He raised his hand to wave at the oncoming bus. It was as though, only the people who exist to him, were on a moving bus, as he was.
The wind clung to the aluminium cladded bus. Though the windows were closed, the chill could still be felt, eyes were boring through the back of his head, and he smacked it as though a fly landed.
Following an unwritten cue, there was a strange feeling in his stomach. There was a lady in the seat behind him, he wasn’t sure if she was there when he looked back at the path he rode, but she was there: still and relaxed. She was inches behind his head, he wanted to look again, but the speaker alerted the next stop.
…
In perfect annunciation, he repeated the words on the screen, of the street he was on. Then it clicked, it was sudden, he booked it down the stairs and charged through the exit towards the back of the bus; he was being followed.
He walked through the shadows of the wind, moving his head phones a few more times. As he sat down and waited, the bus did not drive off, a woman came stepping down. She wore a gown like nanny McPhee, a black plastic bag in her hand; he could hear the sound of the bag getting louder in his head. He could see it inhaling and exhaling.
She had something in that bag, something young.
He looked up in fear, he coward and squinted at the sight of this woman; she had needles sticking out of her face and drops of dried blood, trailing, creating bloody pathways to her cheeks and into her nose.
It was rude to complain about the choices of others, even more, to point them out.
‘Take it, it’s the head of my child. Her blood will keep you young.’
She walked towards the direction of where the bus took off, never looking back.
It was too much for him, his heart thumbed in protest, the stench only got worse. But his nose adjusted to the intoxicating, metallic serum. He took a different approach, he dug his hand inside. Against the palm of his hand he felt dry, cold skin and something wet. He cupped his hand and pulled it out and drank.
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Caitlin Charlton
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Comments (21)
Congratulations on the top story!!!
This was very eerie, I loved it! Congratulations on Top Story.
🎉 Congrats on your Top Story! 📰✨ Super proud of you—so well deserved! 💪👏 Keep shining! 🌟😊
An unsettling and eerie narrative that plays with fear and intrigue.
You did a wonderful job with this story! I can’t wait to read more of your works :)
You sure know how to tell a story, Caitlin. I had no idea where this was heading, and I applaud your ability to keep the reader glued to the page. Congratulations on your top story!
Back to say Congratulations . I'm so glad to see this get recognized
It was rude to complain about the choices of others, even more, to point them out.
Well done, Caitlin. A gripping story and worthy of a Top Story. You go Girl!!!
Creeeeeeepy! Great job - Congratulations on TS!! 🎉🥳
A greatly deserved Top Story!! ⚡💙⚡
Haunting and powerful. Congrats on Top Story!
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
WOW! Top notch work CC! You sure know how to tell a story! Fright, intrigue and excitement all rolled up into the heart of this piece! Awesomely-penned my friend!
Hahahahahahahaha omgggg, this was so dark and delicious! I freaking devoured it!
Totally taken by surprise, you wove a take they made us think then you still went in another direction. The inner monologue of thinking was subtle yet powerful. Great visual line; He could see it inhaling and exhaling.
Oh! This feels creepy and mysterious. That woman is so strange, her words… 😯
Okay, okay. It’s official. This is terrifying, Caitlin! For some reason I was not expecting horror and let it sneak up on me! Really well written! Is this for the Shockwave challenge? Great entry!
What a great gruesome story that is also in a way thrilling. Good job.
Eww, that was graphic and powerful, Caitlin.
Fabulous 👏