A girl’s heart…
“Oh Jeff” flash fiction challenge
Oh, Jeff... I love you too... but..."
“You’re heading off to work. I’ll give you a bell later. We’re still on for Tuesday Thai fried rice, right? See you then.”
Wait, Jeff…
“Good… the flowers arrived. They’ll cheer you up. I knew a touch of home would do the trick. Waratahs, Wattle and Everlasting Daisies aren’t found on every street corner.”
Oh, yes… the flowers… beautiful…
“I know… you wouldn’t survive without me! You’re my everything…”
You’re sweet, but…
Not now Louie!
Jeff, please listen!
I’m sooo sorry…
“Who’s Louie? What’s he doing at your place? The sun’s barely up! Did he sleep over?”
Well, yes… he did...
You know Louie…
“Never heard of him! Fine time to tell me! I was about to ‘Pop the Question’ tonight!”
That’s it!
Jeff, we’re done!
“What! Why?”
Four months together and you still don’t know Louie…
He’s the ‘Love of my Life’!
“You deranged, two-timing…”
“Ruff, ruff, ruff…”
Louie, stop…
SIT!
Down, you silly pup…
Goodbye, Jeff!
“But…”
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Written for Raymond G. Taylor’s challenge.
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Please forgive the clumsy cut and paste. I would like to publish your entry (or entries) to the Oh-Jeff challenge in an upcoming book and of course need your permission to do so. Details are all here: https://todaysurvey.shop/writers/oh-jeff-the-book%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E Thanks, Ray
Well, now, Jeff's dog days certainly didn't end with my story, as I presumed! Well-wrought!
Ha ha, love it. Man's best friend... but perhaps not in this case. Really well done and highly original and surprise ending.
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Haha, this is a fun little drama! Jeff and Louie’s showdown is hilarious. I love how it goes from sweet to “goodbye” in no time! The dog’s timing is spot on, too. It’s got that perfect mix of humor and sass.✨
Fabulous job! :))
Wonderfully humorous take, Angie! Loved it!
Ha! Love me, love my dog! This was fab!
Bro was ready to propose after 4 months??? And he hadn't even passed the dog test yet!!
I had a good laugh, Angie! Louie this misunderstood Man’s Best Friend! LOL!
great entry! Loved this approach :)
Well, if you wont listen...
That stupid narcissist, Jeff! Haha, a truly original approach!
Ah, the gulf between dog-people and non dog-people. I'm tempted to write Jeff's lament, five beers deep, in a grungy bar that evening. Nice take on the challenge.
haha! brilliant take! well done, Angie!
How dare Jefd not know Louie??? Lol. Loved your take on this challenge+
That's great, Angie! Kick him to the curb for that one!