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The Railway Bridge

A Story Every Day in 2024 April 6th 97/366

By Rachel DeemingPublished 2 years ago 2 min read
The Railway Bridge
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Brendon had had a grand time at the pub and was feeling the effects of the four pints as it softened his edges and altered his gait. He was filled with a warm love of life after an evening spent with friends, drinking and laughing.

He headed towards the railway bridge, humming and muttering to himself drunkenly about what a great night he'd had.

The bridge was always in shadow but he didn't fear it. At over six feet tall, he was intimidating to anyone intent on approaching him and his rugby training meant he was up for a challenge, even with alcohol's mellowing.

He heard a noise and saw a figure sat on the edge of the bridge.

Before he had time to think, he'd shouted out a "Hello there!"

The figure turned and in the orange streetlight he saw a hooded face turn towards him, shocked and sad.

"Don't come close!"

Brendon was not quick to register the figure's distress and so responded with a "What are you doing up there on a cold night like this?"

The figure paused. To voice their intent out loud felt frightening even to them. Instead, they sobbed.

"Ah, you're all upset. What's wrong?" Brendon's bonhomie was irresistibly spilling over. All was right in his world and at the moment, he couldn't imagine it being anything different outside of his.

"Leave me alone."

Brendon shrugged and went to say something but sensed resistance. His brain was starting to piece signals together: night, loner, railway bridge, antisocial.

A jumper.

But his tact hadn't caught up.

"Ah, you wouldn't be thinking of jumping now, would you?"

"Can you just leave?"

The emotion was raw in the figure's voice.

Brendon couldn't leave. It wasn't right.

"Don't go anywhere! I'm coming up for a chat!"

"No!"

But Brendon was clumsy with drink and in attempting to climb, slipped, and took a tumble down into brambles.

*

"Are you alright?"

Brendon was bruised with thorns penetrating him in strange places.

A concerned face looked down at him. The hooded figure from the bridge.

He smiled.

"Well, look at you!"

And despite herself and her misery, the hooded figure smiled sheepishly and offered her hand.

***

366 words

Imagine Brendon with a lovable Irish brogue when reading this, if you will, to get the full essence of the character I was trying to convey. Like a big happy puppy dog.

Thanks for stopping by! If you do read this, please do leave a comment as I like to interact with my readers.

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Rachel Deeming

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  • Andrea Corwin 2 years ago

    I love this story! the would-be savior saved himself and that saved the day for both!! What a great twist!

  • Shirley Belk2 years ago

    The Irish brogue gets me every time!

  • D. J. Reddall2 years ago

    An elegantly condensed parable concerning clumsy altruism! Deftly done!

  • Awww, I would have smiled too 🙈🥰 Loved your story and Brendon! Also, are you gonna exchange emails with Randy below? He seems so eager so be friends with you 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣

  • Caroline Craven2 years ago

    You are the best when it comes to twisting the story round and providing such a positive ending. Really loved this one.

  • Mark Gagnon2 years ago

    I really liked this, Rachel! You set the stage beautifully and gave the ending just enough of a twist to end on an upbeat. Well done!

  • D.K. Shepard2 years ago

    What a great ending! Great vivid descriptions of the scene and characters!

  • John Cox2 years ago

    This is a wonderful and good-hearted story, with a delightful twist, Rachel. Pure joy. I agree with Angie, although I can't say that brambles ever did a good turn in my own extensive experience with them. And like Andy, I've known a few Brendon's as well.

  • Aw… what a heartwarming tale… love that the bramble thorns did what Brendon hadn’t succeeded in doing.

  • Andy Potts2 years ago

    Nicely done. I think I've met a few Brendons over the years.

  • randy Davidson 2 years ago

    Proudly heart that still need love even if she has been through a lot, Good, you very best Good Rachel??

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