Journey on the Stairs
Sometimes, we have to descend to ascend

He went one step
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Shed away his ego
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Second step
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Anger loosened its grip
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Third step
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Bitterness drained from his veins
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Fourth step
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Jealousy no longer followed him
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Fifth step
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Greed fell from his hands
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Sixth step
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Judgement stopped clouding his eyes
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Seventh step
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Every grudge was cast aside
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Eighth step
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Thirst for revenge quenched
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Ninth step
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Hatred disappeared entirely
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Tenth step
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He left his body behind
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Free from the weight of Earth
Untouched by its noise
He returned to what he was
Before the world taught him otherwise
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Dharrsheena Raja Segarran
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Comments (64)
What a last line, "Before the world taught him otherwise," definitely worth the journey. Great work Dharrsheena. :)
Very creative and enlightening piece! Congrats on the TS 💖
I love what you created here! It felt contemplative and felt like I was walking downstairs with it. Great effect, Dharr! And congrats on your TS!!! 🤩🤩🤩
Yay! Congrats on your Top Story Queen Shee Shee! 🥳
Wow, this is so thoughtful and very engaging - the ending really stands out because it is life in this physical body and experiences that create all the things that those steps let him release. Of course it is a TOP STORY!! 🎉🎉🎉🎉
Just swinging back to say congrats on your TS
I don’t know how I missed this, but this is a great poem, dear! Made me think of the Lucifer TV series.
And now congratulations on your top story.
And back to say congratulations on your Top Story! :D Brilliant. <3
I love seeing the outpouring of love on this post. Well earned. Congratulations on top story!!!
OMG, This Is Fortunate ❤️❤️❤️Beautifully written 😍 Congratulations 🎊 for Your Brilliant Top Story🎊
I love how the visual layout mimics the actual descent, making the reader feel the burden lifting with every step. The line "Before the world taught him otherwise" is incredibly profound, it’s a beautiful reminder that our truest selves are often found by unlearning the heavy emotions we’ve picked up along the way.
This absolutely awesome, Dharrsheena. I kinda gasped and said, "Ooo!", my eyes wide open when I saw the form, the way you made stair steps out of the same word. The FORM is startling and brilliant. Evocative. (I wish I knew how you managed to indent your letters like you did! I can't ever figure that out! 😂) This is such a different medium than books. I think that the formatting you use here has perhaps even more impact because the reader is already scrolling down. This has a sinking sensation to it. But then the words/message are/is extraordinary too. They are just sharp, inspiration, not a word too much or too few-- perfect. There is an inevitability to this. The message is heavy but you know you're hitting rock bottom soon and you're shedding that weight as you go. It's like a tension between rising and falling. Pulling me up and down at the same time. The title, the subtitle, that gorgeous cover photo! All simply magnificent. So, um... That begs the question... Why don't you write more often? 😉 ⚡💙Bill⚡
I like the formatting :)
♥️I am loving the stylistic choice here, Dharr. Every step we take down your poem is a step he took "d o w n" toward emotional maturity. ♥️Even the lengthening of the word "down" carries a pause so that each achievement hits in a descending order and at a descending pace. I like the rhythm held throughout while the growth of this man remains profound. ♥️The assonance in "revenge quenched" being placed so close together really made it feel like the quenching of a literal thirst.
So very much agree with Susan! Extreme love to you on this one!!!
Absolutely brilliant and amazing Dhar. You always come through as a home run. I also loved the formatting. Brilliantly done as always. I am subscribing to you.
This was amazing. Love the formatting.
This gave me chills. I love it so much. I love how you formatted it, too.
The context, the meaning, the format. Absolutely loved it ❤️
Wow….Im not even going to ask how you formatted that but both the format and the writing is absolutely brilliant my friend. Love it 😊
Love the creativity here Dharr! A brilliant hypnosis into release 😍
Very nice and the format adds something unique to your people. Nice work.
This is absolutely fantastic! You captured the need to release all that weight so well and I loved the structure, too. ❤️
Oh I need this to have top story 3 times for this month; this is incredible work